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Offline TJ Hooker

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I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« on: Jul 19, 2008, 04:44: PM »
let me ask you something, is it a solar ecliption?
or is it a polar description? i am not sure dog, i think it's a solo decision.
my rhymes are funky like a hampsters, i need to be changed like a dirty pamper
or maybe is it a dirty hamper? or am i just an unhappy camper
like when ur dad takes you out, and interupts you when ur trying to make out
with a broad, or possibly you believe in god, in that case its christians fishing with a rod
or is it a mormon lickin my bod, thats unheard of like a jewish dude with a small shcnoz
if its cold out you know its near planet ice, and if it was made for asians it would be planet rice
and if it was for lesbians it would be planet dike, and if u happen to be religious, you guessed it, planet christ
Unbelievable, i thought my girl was faithful, and every night usually she enjoyed a faceful
of my special sauce, or was it just because i was a special boss?
I was bossing through, financially aware of what i was costing you,
like a traitor, not caring what crew i was crossin to
I let my ex girl choke on the wing ding ding a ling
and usually when i rolled in my honda, my song was like bling bling
in soccer, do i hit the post? or do u like cheese and roast?
or honestly am i a friendly ghost?
like casper, or do i start my day with a J like my name was Jasper.

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #1 on: Jul 19, 2008, 09:13: PM »
not so go odi've seen better


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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #2 on: Jul 19, 2008, 09:53: PM »
posting a rap on a football forum, im guessin you wouldn't get the best feedback anyway, but ( i cant believe i thought id say this ) i agree with moby, its just something anyone cold right really, i think you tried to hard tbh

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #3 on: Jul 19, 2008, 10:14: PM »
John Cena?

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #4 on: Jul 20, 2008, 06:44: AM »
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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #5 on: Jul 20, 2008, 08:56: PM »
posting a rap on a football forum, im guessin you wouldn't get the best feedback anyway, but ( i cant believe i thought id say this ) i agree with moby, its just something anyone cold right really, i think you tried to hard tbh

screw you ben bow.


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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #6 on: Jul 21, 2008, 12:14: AM »
"You figured you could rhyme cause you heard a 50 line,
you wanna get rich but you'll probably die trying"

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #7 on: Jul 21, 2008, 12:16: AM »
let me ask you something, is it a solar ...

Holy duck you suck

what a poof
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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #8 on: Jul 21, 2008, 12:21: AM »
TJ Hook =


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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #9 on: Jul 21, 2008, 01:13: AM »
Hahaha Chunck its good to know that great minds think alike thats the exact picture I wanted to post.  :lol:

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #10 on: Jul 21, 2008, 06:03: PM »
aight thanks for the feedback good and bad, i am always trying to step my game up and all that
I try and be deep with my rhymes ( as you can tell in the first lines asking mind boggling questions)
for those saying its whack tell me why. I thought it had substance and makes you think, but im not the audience
so any criticism, and you wanna holla than do it i am always trying to up my game
« Last Edit: Jul 21, 2008, 06:39: PM by TJ Hook »

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Re: I ludda get down (Freestyle) *open to criticism*
« Reply #11 on: Jul 21, 2008, 09:14: PM »
dam dawg u killed it for ya self...